If we keep on doing these，we will be a good student in the future．

【点评】这是一篇给材料作文，在写作中要做到三审：体裁、时态、人称；三思：词汇﹣短语﹣句式；三查：要点、拼写和语法、连贯．

体裁：建议说明类时态:一般现在时人称:we

问题：1.人称不对，是we不是you

2.动名词和祈使句混用：

First，listening to the teachers carefully and study hard are basic.

And follow the rules is important.

V原and V原ing and ing

3.成分残缺（主语--谓语）

2.句式单一：we should贯穿全文

3.不正确使用and连接两个动词

4.Advice不可数

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最重要的发明

假如你校正在开展“小小发明周”的活动。为了响应此活动，你们班组织了一场以“The most important invention"为题的征文比赛。请你根据下面的提示内容，为这次比赛写一篇英语短文。

提示内容:1.你认为最有用的发明是什么?

2.它有什么优点和缺点?

3.你对这个发明的看法?

写作要求:

1.内容必须包含所有信息:

2.结构完整，语句流畅，意思清楚、连贯:

3.使用正确和较丰富的词汇和语法结构，书写规范:

4.文中不得透露个人信息，否则不予评分;

5.词数80左右(短文首句已给出，不计入总词数)

The most important invention

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范文背诵1:

In my opinion,the most useful invention is the Internet.

With the Internet,I can do many things.I can use the Internet as a tool to study because there is a large amount of information stored on the Internet.I can also shop online without leaving my room.As a result,I save a lot of time doing things I am interested in.Also I can keep in touch with my friends by talking online though they may be thousands of miles away.

The Internet makes my life easy and colourful.

范文背诵2:

The most important invention is the mobile phone.

The mobile phone makes it possible for us to communicate

conveniently with others.What's more,with the rapid development of electronic equipment,the mobile phone is getting smaller but more powerful.Nowadays,we can also use a mobile phone to search for information or even shop online.How cool it is!

However,everything has two sides.Looking at our mobile phone too much is bad for our eyes.As students,bringing mobile phones to school will affect our study.Some students even become addicted to mobile games.

So we should use mobile phones properly.

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关于抗疫

范文背诵1:

众志成城抗疫情,齐心向阳理有天。随着新冠肺炎疫情的有效控制,各校已经陆续复学,久别的师生回到了熟悉的校园。复学后,王老师在班上将开展一个主题为Share your life at home during the COVID-19"的演讲活动。让同学们分享疫情期间居家生活的经历相感受。假如你是李华。请从以下四个方面写一份演讲稿。